tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post115892483059453449..comments2020-06-13T13:53:18.071+00:00Comments on Mortal Ghost: Chapter TenLeehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13770069472552779217noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-44124731530480956272007-08-02T13:02:00.000+00:002007-08-02T13:02:00.000+00:00The pacing is just right. It was getting to be tim...The pacing is just right. It was getting to be time to start providing some answers to the mystery of Jesse's past, and this chapter delivers some. It's impressive that you've managed to sustain the suspense until now, while keeping readers intrigued.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1159301897826634812006-09-26T20:18:00.000+00:002006-09-26T20:18:00.000+00:00Wonderful writing, Lee. Every chapter draws me in....Wonderful writing, Lee. Every chapter draws me in.<BR/>AddyWilfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15255247027469318384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1159233003380146912006-09-26T01:10:00.000+00:002006-09-26T01:10:00.000+00:00So now we're a quarter of the way through. Thanks,...So now we're a quarter of the way through. Thanks, Lee, for the suggestion of the road map-- it put this reader at ease.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1159204965412743272006-09-25T17:22:00.000+00:002006-09-25T17:22:00.000+00:00Another catchy episode. Thanks Lee.Another catchy episode. Thanks Lee.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1159006325936730212006-09-23T10:12:00.000+00:002006-09-23T10:12:00.000+00:00Thought the positioning of this:' A burst of high-...Thought the positioning of this:<BR/>' A burst of high-pitched laughter through the open window, a shout of my turn.' after what had gone one before was inspired. <BR/><BR/>A lot has become clear now at just the right time. Looking forward to the rest.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1158989029057077722006-09-23T05:23:00.000+00:002006-09-23T05:23:00.000+00:00Cailleach, there will be ca. 40 chapters altogethe...Cailleach, there will be ca. 40 chapters altogether in MORTAL GHOST. I've added a note to this effect on the sidebar.Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13770069472552779217noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1158953896099250382006-09-22T19:38:00.000+00:002006-09-22T19:38:00.000+00:00I agree! How many more chapters to go...? :¬)I agree! How many more chapters to go...? :¬)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06280161801824435219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-28875475.post-1158939776033781232006-09-22T15:42:00.000+00:002006-09-22T15:42:00.000+00:00Wow ! This just keeps getting more interesting and...Wow ! This just keeps getting more interesting and more intriguing... I like this change of tense:<BR/><BR/><I>With an effort Jesse averted his eyes. An unbidden picture of his family, their last meal together. One of his mother’s roast chickens. He can taste the crisp brown skin that Emmy won’t eat. He can taste the cold lager with its head of foam from which he’s allowed to sip. And the other taste, the one mingling with the smell of sweat and the sound of harsh loud breaths, hot against his neck. Again, and again. Will it never end? Pain – hot and fierce – flays his back, his shoulders, his throat. Jesse! Where are you? It’s hot. Jesse!</I><BR/><BR/>It's very effective.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com